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    Author: reifumo
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    I close my eyes
    And fit between each note
    In your soft melody
    I float between realities
    But when the song ends
    So do I
    I lose my grip on the endless blue
    That I once called my own
    I shatter
    Each feather
    Each memory
    Fragile and delicate
    Like ice
    Porcelain
    Glass Broken
    Still hopelessly caught in your twisted game
    That no one ever wins
    That I can never win
    This horrific maze that I myself
    Had helped to weave
    Did I ever fly?
    Or was it just a dream?






    Submitted on 2009-10-24 16:23:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem gives a heavy feeling of melancholy, and is stunning with how visual you've made it to be. It's brought back sad memories, but it was an intense pleasure to read. Emotions were put into words how I never expected they would be able to. Keep up the great work, you're an amazing writer. (Thumbs up.)
    | Posted on 2009-10-26 00:00:00 | by halfjack | [ Reply to This ]


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