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Author: SilentDreams42
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Class/Type: Poetry /Alone
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I crave the truth
For fabrication breaks me
And swallows me whole

I starve for the truth
That lingers at the bottom
Deep beneath the grave of falsehood

The innocent
The vengeful
The hateful

All are lies
That bury us with them
In an endless grave

I yearn for the truth

Submitted on 2009-10-24 20:45:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Great write!

I too yearn for the truth.
| Posted on 2009-10-25 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree with your sentiments here, but truth is VERY hard to come by. As quoted from the most important Book ever, "Man is a liar, and the father of it." Yes Sir, we can all catch ourselves every day at so-called 'white" lies.
| Posted on 2009-10-24 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]

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