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    dots Submission Name: Thoughts of Youdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThoughts of Youdots
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    You don't concern me
    Neither does she
    Just steps in my life
    Survival maybe

    I step on forward
    As I step over you
    Though heavy heartily
    Sympathetic view

    A piece left behind
    My blood spills before
    Because of all the moments
    I so much adored

    I've spectated this instance
    I've found lead can bleed
    Because this heart is filled
    The one inside me

    But I have much more to spill
    And my lead heart will last
    Forgiving and forgetting
    All the moments of my past

    So I may step with a wince
    But my legs will not halt
    And I'm done pointing fingers
    Because it's both our fault




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