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    dots Submission Name: The Cheshire Catdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Cheshire Catdots
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    You know I'm going away
    My days are numbered now
    Leaving everything behind
    New treasures to be found

    But if someone asked if you cared
    It would be hard to say
    Because for nearly a year now
    Been here with you away

    And God knows I've tried
    And He knows I have prayed
    And I've tried hard to fix
    All the mistakes that I've made

    But I don't see a better way
    I see no light at the end
    This feeling will always remain
    With no real way to mend

    But I won't leave empty handed
    I'm taking with me your smile
    For the warm feeling I get
    I'll use it once in a while
    I hope you don't mind




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      i like it mang, just a few flow fixes in my opinion.
    i know that sounds like nit picking and you didnt ask for that....
    "All the mistakes that I've made"
    to- all the mistakes that I made

    "This feeling will always remain"
    to -This feeling will remain

    to me the vibe i get from this is that you are at a point where you want to move on but something is holding you back(a person/thing)
    and now that you have come to your senses
    you have no regrets and you want to take the good out of the experience.

    and it sounds like some -staind- lyrics
    (in a good way, i like staind)

    alliance mang
    | Posted on 2009-10-26 00:00:00 | by ghad | [ Reply to This ]


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