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    dots Submission Name: I'm So Sorrydots
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    Author: Eyamma
    ASL Info:    16/Sry, I'm taken/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 22/21/77
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 827
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1286



    Description:
       Hehe. It's mah b-day poem! I just typed it up on my birthday, and though it's definitely not my best. Atleast it's some sort of writing. I've been stuck in a ditch for a while.


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    dotsI'm So Sorrydots
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    Where did you go, my darling?
    Are you still hidiní beneath the fern tree?
    Will I see you in the poppy fields, gathering flowers in your hair?

    Iíve looked for you everywhere.
    Still, I feel I must confess.
    I made our lives such a mess.

    Iím so sorry.

    Here I am again, hoping youíll be by my side in the morning.
    All Iíd do just to see your sun kissed face next to mine.
    Itís the time weíve lost that I canít cry for.
    Itís all the moments I can't mend, anymore.

    In this disarray, I hear you call my name.
    Over and over, again.

    Make it end.

    Where are you, sweetheart?
    I never meant to lose sight of you.
    Will you see this through?
    Because every time I see your eyes in the mirror,
    I find myself back in our special place.

    The one place, no one else knew.
    There, I knew you loved me.
    There, I could smile forever and never grow tired of the light bubbling Ďneath my tingling skin.

    I just wish we could let our sins go undone
    And unravel into one,

    So weíd never be separated again,

    And love each other until the very end...




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