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    dots Submission Name: aperturedots
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    Author: ghad
    ASL Info:    25/m/fl
    Elite Ratio:    5.86 - 45/28/38
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 27
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 357



    Description:
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    dotsaperturedots
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    Outside your home
    Prone
    War paint and
    Full camo
    Waiting patiently
    For your cameo
    Controlling my breath
    And heart rate
    Slowing the mind set
    Eye on my asset
    Lights camera action
    Snap shot
    Down snipe
    All I see after recoil is red mist
    And its drop dead gorgeous




    Submitted on 2009-10-26 05:19:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You sick m.f., this is quite hilarious in that I've-got-enough-guns-to-blow-you-to-tx way that allows me to laugh at it...

    You're certainly going to get some responses on this, I bet.
    | Posted on 2009-10-26 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]


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