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    dots Submission Name: Here's Todots
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    Author: Flynn
    ASL Info:    24/M/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.77 - 74/123/48
    Words: 387
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
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    dotsHere's Todots
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    Just back from Grayling, feeling Hooah.

    Also found the A787 group, all the guys and gals from BCT... reading some of their writings and comments brought tears to my eyes.
    It was hell, but it brings nothing but good memories.

    "I'm going to write a book... How Quickly We Forget." -DS Oaks

    See to me, that one line there is hilarious, a catalyst for amazing memories of the man who made me a soldier.

    "Logan huh? That's Wolverine's name you know Private. He was in the army too. So I guess that makes you a wolverine."
    -DS Walker

    The man who made me a man, who taught me to confront me fears.

    "You look alot older than that, the hell happened to you?"
    -DS Mitchell

    The man who showed me strength and bravery.

    "Yes I'm 500 miles away from home..."
    PVT Queen, the man who showed me the heart in men, who showed me there will be someone there no matter how remote you feel.

    "Good Job Solomon, you made it."
    DS Oaks as he shook my hand, a huge smile on his face.
    I am a frail guy, emotional unstable and mentally weak. He used to tear me apart but in retrospect, it was so I could build myself up. Were it not for Oaks, and Walker too, I would not be an MP, I would not be a soldier.

    I would not be a man.

    I know none of the cadre of A 787 will ever see this, hell I hope they don't.

    Thank you.
    I made it because you made me make it.

    Here's to our fighting men and women across the pond, laying their lives on the line on behalf of each of us.
    Here's to the families of these brave men and women, the worry, the pain, the suffering.
    Here's to the NCO's, the CO's, even the warrant officers.
    Here's to the best goddamn fighting force on God's green earth.

    Here's to those we fight for, to those whom we love.

    You are our strength, the reason for fighting, for coming home.

    To first kisses and goodbye smooches. To those warm hugs and nights. To those who give a soldier his heart.

    Very Fucking Hooah




    Submitted on 2009-10-26 10:57:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a nice change from reading all the poems out there. It's not purposefully changed to rhyme, or flowered up to sound prettier, the honesty is brutal and beautiful at the same time.

    Very F'ing hooah indeed.
    | Posted on 2009-10-28 00:00:00 | by Iffy | [ Reply to This ]


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