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    dots Submission Name: 6 monthsdots

    Author: xieno
    Elite Ratio:    2.41 - 7/16/24
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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       Written for my amazing, beautiful boyfriend, Markus, for our 6 month anniversary next Monday. Art is a huge part of both our lives so I thought it would be a nice theme. He is my drive, my inspiration and just the reason for all the good in my life right now. I'm completely in love with this boy and he deserves the whole wide world, and this little song is just my way of saying thanks for the best 6 months I've ever experienced.

    Note: I haven't written much, hell, at all in along long time. So sorry if this is a little scratchy. I'll probably go back over it when I feel like it. Hope you enjoy whats here now though.

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    You told me that artistry is unoriginal
    But the canvas world we live in is one of a kind
    You are my Picasso and I'll be your brush
    Your embrace can varnish the brown Autumn neon
    Our love will stain the night in deep scarlet.

    And I'll never forget
    That radiant May day
    The day you came
    And saved my life
    And I know now that
    Even the simplest works of art
    Can be so damn beautiful

    I stretch for your brush
    The bristles that make up who you are
    The colors I fell in love with
    Are suddenly no longer there
    But I suddenly realize youre shedding your prior colors
    For me

    And I'll never forget
    That radiant May day
    The day you came
    And saved my life
    And I know now that
    Even the simplest works of art
    Can be so damn beautiful

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      The repitition was interesting, and all together this is a beautiful poem. Nice work, I hope the one you have written it for feels the same.
    | Posted on 2009-10-27 00:00:00 | by halfjack | [ Reply to This ]

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