Past Our Inflictions.
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Inspired by C. S. Lewis' "Til We Have Faces"
Past Our Inflictions.
I once heard the gods speak and they had no sympathy for our case, apparently, our foolish ways brought us more pain than our fates could ever dream of and love? they would never interfere... even if they did, I doubt you'd be here so no cupid's arrow for us we fell on our own master's of our own fates, we always say but there's only one captain on a ship and we're sailing alone I never liked the open sea as i'm sure you recall so I'm turning around, heading for home and you can stay behind that goddess wall. You know, cupid fell in love once with a regular kind of girl.... she was only human, made mistakes like the rest of us but that was enough for him, that was enough. |
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| the first two lines are very strong.. the gods dont have sympathy for case.. hm. Thats a strange and very hard thing to write i think. I also like the second stanza.. "so no cupid's arrow for us we fell on our own" it feels very unique of its kind, although i must say.. even though i really like the last stanza.. i dont seem to put it in with the rest.. I mean, what message was that sending ? cupid fell in love with a girl who makes mistakes..... and thats enough. Dunno.. it just kept me thinking. | Posted on 2010-01-20 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ] | 'You know, | cupid fell in love once with a regular kind of girl.... she was only human, made mistakes like the rest of us but that was enough for him, that was enough.' Wow . . . . . Okay, other than the grammar mistakes (Which I also have tons of.) this was very original! At Least to me >_> I really enjoyed reading it! That last versus got me, like was said from your last commenter. It was powerful, it always is powerful when you read the stories about the gods falling head over heels for some plain Jane human girl. But rarely do you hear that, their always different, so in your 'story' I put a girl with blond hair, green eyes, olive tone skin, a long ovalish face, and a box-ish body. And you know what, that's the most beautiful woman in the world, in my opinion. ( Straight girls opinion, wonder what a guy would say  ) It doesn't take outer beauty, or dressing, or even brains to make a woman or a man beautiful, only a heart that's eternally forgiving and always kind ^_^| Posted on 2009-11-02 00:00:00 | by Scaredheart | [ Reply to This ] | The last verse got me, more than the ones before it for some reason. | The rhyme was kind of irregular in places, but then, so was the piece or at least it seemed that way to me. Im not exactly sure what to say or how this peice made me feel except that it left me questioning... Channie | Posted on 2009-10-27 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ] | how much fun. I really like the piece. I wasn't sure what the rhyme was, kind of ever, but your rhetoric was amazing. | Wishing for more ~Brian | Posted on 2009-10-27 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ] | |
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