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    dots Submission Name: Crossing Linesdots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    15/Female/tmon
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 92/158/234
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 15
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1034



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    dotsCrossing Linesdots
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    Walls close in
    Cheeks frozen
    Skeletons break up time
    Don’t say a word
    Everyone’s already heard
    You already crossed that line

    Cold distracts
    Lungs collapse
    Gravity turns back time
    Walking amongst them
    Now you’re one of them
    You already crossed that line

    Flames are chosen
    Eyes are glowing
    Eternal rest displaces time
    Hide your fear
    And your uncommon anger here
    You’ve already shut the blinds

    Ears catch sound waves
    Both miserable and brave
    Dragging me out of this bind
    Don’t look at me
    We can never be
    Can’t you read minds?

    Look me over, as your greedy eyes do
    Only you, could not see right through
    I set up a mirror
    Imposing on my self
    And I cannot make it
    Not without your help

    And I want you to help me
    Forget the signs
    Haven’t you already crossed those lines?




    Submitted on 2009-10-27 07:21:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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