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    dots Submission Name: One Last Utterancedots
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    Author: vLame
    ASL Info:    21/m/lbc
    Elite Ratio:    1.61 - 15/18/50
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 36
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 1454



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    dotsOne Last Utterancedots
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    i don't wanna be happy anymore
    don't wanna smile again
    those actions wont be for the one i love again
    i want to lose myself
    die without pity
    live without stupidity
    leave this infinity
    cry without dignity
    i dont want this
    you dont want me
    sadly
    i fucked up
    badly
    im done for
    gradually
    it gets harder every day
    the more and more
    i pray
    for death
    accidential
    or a lethal disease
    to carry me away
    away and gone
    im not strong
    strong enough to continue
    self to blade my sinew
    to end this, to start anew
    refresh my memory on why i stay?
    faith, you? me? it? why?
    i realize i cry nevermore
    it's one thing to be
    another to want to, me
    shame, i dislike it as a whole
    perhaps purgatory has lovely more
    take my life, dear misery
    you agree, you make life full of distress
    a dirty whore, a sweet temptress
    you keep my mind in shackles
    my heart in pain
    what do i gain?
    first refrain
    my desire to live slain
    wanton want to stay
    die die die
    sigh sigh sigh
    i make believe
    it'll get better
    i lie lie lie
    i shall keep my promise
    one day i'll have one last utterance
    and it shall be
    goodbye....




    Submitted on 2009-10-27 14:47:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am really impressed by your use of language. Accessible, but very effective. I can really imagine the feeling you are trying to convey.

    | Posted on 2009-10-27 00:00:00 | by LaxGoalie | [ Reply to This ]


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