Amazing poem! :D I love how engraved into your mind you make this person sound! It's mesmerising! ...but there are a few problems regarding grammar and rhyme. I know rhyme isn't madated for a poem since the invention of free verse but it kinda seems like a let down when you read the first stanza and think "okay, it's a rhymer" only to find that there are sparse rhymes through the meter. Grammar wise, it doesn't quite follow English standards sentence or poem wise with puctuation, making it a run on poem, a bit comfusing on where to start and stop and somewhat less emotional. While you did a REALLY great job with it, I think you could, potentially, make it more mysterious and loving if you were to explain a little more and make some more "emotionally moving" sentences. I hope you found this to be constructive :).