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    dots Submission Name: The First Timedots
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    Author: LaxGoalie
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 6/4/7
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 34
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1364



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    dotsThe First Timedots
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    From the first time that we met
    I knew I would not forget you
    From the way that you did not look
    And the way that you did talk

    Taken from a fantasy
    Coming from a perfect dream
    Like an angel in the dark
    A beacon for those who are lost

    I’ve gone days without tears
    I’ve done weeks without fear
    Knowing you’ll be there for me
    Whenever that time may be

    As a million roses that won’t welt
    Perfect in the way defined
    Not a problem in my mind
    When you just sit by my side

    There are secrets that we share
    And I hope our trust won’t ever tear
    Secret admirations are the words I hear
    When I see you in my mind

    I’ve gone days without tears
    I’ve done weeks without fear
    Knowing you’ll be there for me
    Whenever that time may be

    You know we’ll get through this
    Taking it one step at a time
    I just don’t know what to do
    When I want to be with you

    My heart has been caught
    And will not leave me alone
    It’s all your fault
    I’ve been lost without you

    I’ve gone days without tears
    I’ve done weeks without fear
    Knowing you’ll be there for me
    Whenever that time may be




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      Very beautiful! But sadly, it's a bit worse than your other poem though not by much... It's lacking grammar still and you have sparse rhyme which is even worse and less lyrical, in my opinion than no rhyme, because you have no rhyme scheme and rhymes just... appear.
    | Posted on 2009-10-28 00:00:00 | by Plegias | [ Reply to This ]


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