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    dots Submission Name: The First Timedots
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    Author: LaxGoalie
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 6/4/8
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 443
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1364



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    dotsThe First Timedots
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    From the first time that we met
    I knew I would not forget you
    From the way that you did not look
    And the way that you did talk

    Taken from a fantasy
    Coming from a perfect dream
    Like an angel in the dark
    A beacon for those who are lost

    Iíve gone days without tears
    Iíve done weeks without fear
    Knowing youíll be there for me
    Whenever that time may be

    As a million roses that wonít welt
    Perfect in the way defined
    Not a problem in my mind
    When you just sit by my side

    There are secrets that we share
    And I hope our trust wonít ever tear
    Secret admirations are the words I hear
    When I see you in my mind

    Iíve gone days without tears
    Iíve done weeks without fear
    Knowing youíll be there for me
    Whenever that time may be

    You know weíll get through this
    Taking it one step at a time
    I just donít know what to do
    When I want to be with you

    My heart has been caught
    And will not leave me alone
    Itís all your fault
    Iíve been lost without you

    Iíve gone days without tears
    Iíve done weeks without fear
    Knowing youíll be there for me
    Whenever that time may be




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    ||| Comments |||
      Very beautiful! But sadly, it's a bit worse than your other poem though not by much... It's lacking grammar still and you have sparse rhyme which is even worse and less lyrical, in my opinion than no rhyme, because you have no rhyme scheme and rhymes just... appear.
    | Posted on 2009-10-28 00:00:00 | by Plegias | [ Reply to This ]


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