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    dots Submission Name: Consiliencedots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio State
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 174/189/127
    Words: 594
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsConsiliencedots
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    Snow-drifts
    as time
    along a fifty mile strip
    of cracking tar rubbed raw by the constancy
    of speeding cars roaring past this crumbling city,
    indifferent to the frost matted fields
    or the give and take of December lovers
    walking hand in hand up High Street.

    Work shifts
    along
    as long as they've ever been
    and we talk less now,
    now that she's busier
    our weekdays waste by
    and I'm awake, always
    trying to sleep all the time.
    My life is wound tight in a stress-cord
    I don't want to unwind,
    I live once, burn strong,
    and then I die;
    Don't lesson the experience.

    So indulge.

    Swift dips
    in her form cut
    along, like a razor
    my lust has lost control, revel in the nature
    of the smooth slips of skin between plaid fabric
    tracing her hips and tasting her depravity
    it begs as much as beckons to give to the insanity
    to indulge in the heat, the passion, the intimacy
    of her pressed close to a heaving chest, proud
    with the lunacy, of effort and reward,
    the consillience of the moment
    hinged on the edge of each other

    those things will come less and less
    in life and that's a fleeting truth
    to dwell on,
    so everyone always chooses
    the lesser path
    the one that leads to nothing
    time is longer lived together,
    time is longer spent always loving every moment
    in between the things that wear us thin.

    Loneliness is the cold fire
    that ignites at the core of my everything
    it moves my world, my feet, and my focus
    from you to the wrath of the locusts that
    plague my every waking moment in this place
    I hate that I'm so far away
    from everything that matters.
    I hate that I'm so far away
    from where I want to be.




    Submitted on 2009-10-27 17:26:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is definitely inspirational on a few levels. However, you have me curious. -what was it that promoted this write, this work? What was it that drew you to make these connections, assumptions, relations, dimensions? What was your inspiration? Believe me, hopefully. -I ask everybody questions concerning their work. I want to know what makes them tick, in a manner of speaking. That way, I am able to give them an actual critique. A real critique.

    Looking forward to it.

    C.
    | Posted on 2009-10-27 00:00:00 | by misschalloner | [ Reply to This ]


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