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    dots Submission Name: Kaliedoscopedots
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    Author: Plegias
    ASL Info:    17/ male/ my house
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 37/23/40
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 638
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 817



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    dotsKaliedoscopedots
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    A simple turn of a knob,
    What do you see?
    Have your sights been robbed?
    What do I mean?
    In the cylinder, panes in a quarrel,
    There is a large Red fighting off Blues,
    The Yellow in personal chattel,
    The Green simply dazed and confuzed.
    The Purple in uproar,
    The Gray most chastised,
    The Black the White abhors,
    The Orange never apprised.
    This mumble- jumble mess of mumbo- jumbo,
    This ignorant mess of something senseless,
    This thing lit by only a flambeau,
    This bold blob of bouyancy apparently dauntless.
    But with the single turn of the screw,
    And with the slip of the thumb,
    The picture becomes something no one can rue,
    The Kaliedoscope becomes an imagination's endless chasm.




    Submitted on 2009-10-27 20:40:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well, y'know, I never thought anything about the mood of it, but reading back I see what you mean...
    | Posted on 2009-10-28 00:00:00 | by Plegias | [ Reply to This ]
      Good job. I love the imagery of the colours. You make it seem really lively, and make the colours stand out. Unlike me, you do pay attention to punctuation, making it an easier read.

    I dont know why, but I cant help but feel sad by this poem. Is that just me?
    | Posted on 2009-10-28 00:00:00 | by LaxGoalie | [ Reply to This ]


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