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    dots Submission Name: Sing a Song I cant Heardots
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    Author: charmedidentity
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.9 - 864/897/406
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 529
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I can start off a song with a slow soft voice singing my story but gradually, when no one hears me, I keep getting louder and louder until eventually, I scream. Only then, can you hear what I'm really talking about. Things get the best of you until you eventually loose, that's when you got everyone's attention....


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    dotsSing a Song I cant Heardots
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    In your world of music
    You sing a song
    I hear your beat
    Then hear my chest
    It follows the sound
    It follows you
    You sing that song
    And I see your world

    “Drown me now
    Moving slow
    I’m on the go
    I go below”

    You take a breath
    To tell a tale
    Through your voice
    Your heart sings deep
    I hear the beating
    I hear the noise
    You tell that tale
    My breath is with you

    “Drown me now
    Moving slow
    I’m on the go
    I go below”

    You scream a word
    My head screams too
    The rhythm flows
    Down to my nerves
    I get the essence
    Of what was nonsense
    Your voice is screaming
    And only now I’m hearing

    “Drown me now
    Moving slow
    I’m on the go
    I go below”




    Submitted on 2009-10-27 20:45:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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