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    Author: O
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    You long to write—
    I tell you the poem has not died.

    If one writer is able to make his pilgrimage to Rainy Mountain and reflect the presence of his dead grandmother off this image—a grasshopper upon the creaky handrail of a porch, chirping its song to its one reciprocal mate, its body encased by the low, full moon—then so too has the poem become a fossil.

    You retort your wit—
    I tell you fossils preserve life.

    Trace fossils preserve the motion of an organism, marks it left behind, like a footprint. Body fossils preserve bones, and with a little bit of science and imagination, it is not difficult to locate an organism’s beating ghost-heart. Chemofossils preserve biochemical signals which cannot be seen by the eye, but sometimes the most revealing detection of vision does not rely on the moist eye. I repeat ‘preserve’ three times in the hope my words will be wrapped in an amber voice, preserving you.

    You blink twice, say nothing—
    I tell you the universe is beautiful.

    Someday, the universe is going to eat me. This doesn’t make me afraid because scientifically, from what we know, there is nothing out there that isn’t already a part of my atoms. I imagine pink and purple dust-flowers opening their petals to let me in, and then they will close, and I will be black. But you can imagine my ghost-heart just beyond my spine, listen to its beating in the pulsating of night stars.

    You move upon me as the universe—
    We learn why we must go on.






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      Sometimes, I hate what we are, how we do things, how we go through with things. And personally, there has never been a time in the emergency room where I give birth to my work when I didn't feel like walking away from it all. I don't know how it is for you, but that's how it is for me. But every time I hit that last note, every time I feel "it is done," and I look around seeing how my life turned out with the unmade sheets, the pile of mugs with residues of either chocolate milk, Coke or latte, and the ashtrays, not once did I ever feel it's not worth it.

    I like how you touched upon the science of it all because you did it without taking away the magic. You dissected the topic but you didn't violate it.

    "You blink twice, say nothing—
    I tell you the universe is beautiful."

    It is this open-mindedness that makes a great poet, I think - the ability to study things and not fear them because at the end of the exploration, respect will be formed.
    | Posted on 2009-11-14 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      
    The Joy of Writing


    Why does this written doe bound through these written woods?
    For a drink of written water from a spring
    whose surface will xerox her soft muzzle?
    Why does she lift her head; does she hear something?
    Perched on four slim legs borrowed from the truth,
    she pricks up her ears beneath my fingertips.
    Silence - this word also rustles across the page
    and parts the boughs
    that have sprouted from the word "woods."

    Lying in wait, set to pounce on the blank page,
    are letters up to no good,
    clutches of clauses so subordinate
    they'll never let her get away.

    Each drop of ink contains a fair supply
    of hunters, equipped with squinting eyes behind their sights,
    prepared to swarm the sloping pen at any moment,
    surround the doe, and slowly aim their guns.

    They forget that what's here isn't life.
    Other laws, black on white, obtain.
    The twinkling of an eye will take as long as I say,
    and will, if I wish, divide into tiny eternities,
    full of bullets stopped in mid-flight.
    Not a thing will ever happen unless I say so.
    Without my blessing, not a leaf will fall,
    not a blade of grass will bend beneath that little hoof's full stop.

    Is there then a world
    where I rule absolutely on fate?
    A time I bind with chains of signs?
    An existence become endless at my bidding?

    The joy of writing.
    The power of preserving.
    Revenge of a mortal hand.


    -Wislawa Szymborska
    | Posted on 2009-11-13 00:00:00 | by O | [ Reply to This ]
      and so those flowers have opened. like the eyes of an unborn mermaid floating in her mother's womb. Tuesday, Alia, she will begin to be born, and no poem i could write could ever begin to express the way i feel or will feel.

    amber, now, though...that's something i can imagine, that golden shell which suffocates as it preserves...that's something i know well. and it is why eternity has always terrified me.

    my daughter laughed today and called me a turtle. is she not the funniest little soldier on the maternity ward block?!

    oh, i need a good long nap!

    | Posted on 2009-11-13 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      'I repeat ‘preserve’ three times in the hope my words will be wrapped in an amber voice, preserving you.'- I'll ditto clay, this part is wonderful, it speaks to me of a transcending love. Something you don't say say in this write, but you say.

    This makes me think of breathing in and breathing out, that calming feeling. It will be over and if I get a little scared then this piece will breathe for me.

    Your language is lovely, so balanced and soft, almost maternal, but greater than that. The tone of this is just right

    I expect I'll be back in a week or two with a proper response, right now I can only say 'yes'.

    'Yes'.

    Aly
    | Posted on 2009-11-03 00:00:00 | by AlyRose | [ Reply to This ]
      Biofeedback - this could make men cry. Mindframe-of-reference, it's a grasp to the billions who move through the same time and space without a backward glance at how critically beautiful life, nature, science and the Universe are in their own right, before their transcending powers upon gather up atoms into conscious, oblivious bundles.
    This now is so real.
    | Posted on 2009-11-01 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem shows a lot of bravery, and I'm not sure I'm ready to handle it all yet. I'm afraid of the black and the unknown, but I agree with you about the atoms. This appealed to my chem/anthro side, and my inner nerd chuckled and snorted quite a bit. I love this, it's real and it speaks beautifully about things most people are afraid to think about. It's love.
    So are you.
    | Posted on 2009-11-01 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      I hope it is as simple and beautiful as being swallowed whole... blinking black. That is so beautifully thought-out, I really love that. Purple flowers remind me of the bursting corpuscles, bruised and sucked-into-anti-gravity arteries squeezing shut, before that last blink... like an old tv set before Cable or something. A shrinking dot that just... blinks. YEAH! AWESOME!

    Thanks for that lovely thought! One of my relatives saw flowers when she died, maybe that was it...
    | Posted on 2009-11-01 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      I understand what you're talking about. I am jealous of your state of mind here, because I am afraid. I haven't arrived at that point yet where I'm content to say: "this is just a ride, it's just a ride". So, I value these serene words because I strive towards them. Striving towards you know, that all roads are still open.

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2009-11-01 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      I repeat ‘preserve’ three times in the hope my words will be wrapped in an amber voice, preserving you.

    gives me goose-flesh and makes me want to sing hallelujah (Leonard Cohen style) because some comforts are held in just knowing there will always be traces left behind

    i'm no good at dissecting your work...we both know that but i can tell you what is going on in my head after reading....

    Things move, shift, die and live on all the time. we are the universe and the universe is one with it's hand upon our hair telling us to "be still child" ...all the while we kick, scream and fight to be heard, to make sense to be "Forever" an imprint on what we are already a part of...beginning and ending with
    All We Need Is LOVE
    yeah

    it is sad that my feeble comment is the only one here
    this Beauty deserves more then i can give

    Much Love to You
    me
    | Posted on 2009-10-29 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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