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    dots Submission Name: This is realdots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    15/Female/tmon
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 92/158/234
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 14
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsThis is realdots
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    Look me in the eyes once more
    And tell me again how I make you feel
    You send shivers racing down my spine
    This is how I know this is real

    Although suspicions are unshakable
    And my heart is very breakable
    When you look at me
    I know exactly who I want to be

    If no one approves
    Let them stare
    Together we will never lose
    Can you taste the freedom in the air?

    I’ll take you, proudly, by the hand
    To let them know you are my man
    And we’ll walk side by side
    With nothing left to hide

    Your kiss is so passionate
    Like nothing I’ve ever felt before
    You lips pressed to mine
    This is my reward

    I’ll look you in the eyes once more
    And I’ll tell you how you make me feel
    Sending shivers racing down your spine
    This is how I know we are real




    Submitted on 2009-10-28 07:14:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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