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    dots Submission Name: final goodbyedots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    16 going on 17
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 174/201/192
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Poetry/Lostfriend
    Total Views: 17
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1591



    Description:
       "as she walked away, she hid her tears. If it was like those romance novels he would grab her and tell her not to leave. However with every step she took, her heart sank deeper. When she turned around, he was alreadly gone."



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    dotsfinal goodbyedots
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    it haunts me
    I had nothing left to say.
    you got my idea
    so you simply walked away.

    I know it's best.
    to leave you so alone.
    but your friendship was
    the one thing I've ever known.

    I guess it's called a crush for a reason
    that's one thing that deosn't change.
    I found my true love,
    but I was also up for blame.

    I lied to you.
    until you were pleading for me to stop
    I walked on your emotions.
    and I threw up on your heart.

    I wonder if I'll ever get a chance again.
    If I'll ever cross your mind.
    hate me, destroy me.
    do what it takes to leave me behind.

    walk away now
    if you know what's good for you.
    I always let people down.
    it's something i tend to do.

    I did warn you.
    I said" I will only let you down"
    you laughed in my face and said "no way"
    it sucks to be right now.

    I hope one day you'll read this.
    and say "she always knew my heart"
    when I look back.
    I hope we're not too far apart.

    well, I guess I should be going.
    it's too late to turn around.
    the past is just the past.
    and I always let you down.

    If I had to say something to you.
    never say I didn't try.
    I tried harder than you thought.
    but It's our final goodbye.






    Submitted on 2009-10-28 08:11:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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