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    dots Submission Name: december eyesdots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    16 going on 17
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 174/201/192
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Story/Love
    Total Views: 23
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    Bytes: 996



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    dotsdecember eyesdots
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    The ice around her heart was melting. His dismal smile made the sunlight look pathic. She held her head high. There was no use in trying to hide her tears. She grabbed his hand. "I love you, you know that right?" His sad blue eyes looked into hers. They were looking for something. He looked away then back at her.His voice cracked when he replied with a faint yes. Her red waves flashed with lighting. Her green eyes looked scared. So afraid that he reached out and held her. She clung to his shirt and felt the rain fall. Was this how they ended? In the rain? He whispered in her ear. "don't leave me yet."
    He held up a ring. The storm worsen at the sight of it. Her face broke out in a smile. The rain could fall now as hard as it wanted. Her hair hung in damp curls around her eyes. With one hand he put on the ring. With the other he pulled her hair out of her deep green eyes. She glanced at him. Right before she kissed him, She saw his december blue eyes.




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