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    dots Submission Name: A Happy Dreamdots
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    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2.37 - 46/71/89
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 22
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsA Happy Dreamdots
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    I woke up today
    With a smile on my face.
    I stretched my arms,
    And they fall back in place.

    A dream I had,
    And a happy one at that.
    Where the sky was bright,
    And I knelt petting a cat.

    The birds were chirping
    And flowers were pretty,
    I began to jog
    A pace so steady.

    People saying hi,
    And greeting me well.
    Until I stumbled
    And fell.

    I stood back up,
    And smiled some more.
    A gash on my leg,
    Where the rock had tore.

    It bothered me none,
    I continued on.
    And tipped my hat,
    To the seregate nun.

    And when I did awake,
    I was happy at first.
    But realized life was good in my dream,
    But here it was the worst.




    Submitted on 2009-10-28 12:51:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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