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    dots Submission Name: Rememberdots
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    Author: intodesi
    ASL Info:    28/m/On The Road
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 16/23/28
    Words: 534
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsRememberdots
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    Dim nights have clouded this masquerade we have danced in. With lies and secrets we seek solitude. Knowing the last love was lost to the dark gold plated path of the past.

    Sharing the passion of the evolved dusk, the nights of heat and the days we walked along dirt clod paths. In a simple since we have lost this fight, in a simple since we have both tried. Now I am stuck in a whirl wind of desperate sadness and tasted taint.

    For a simple truth we seek that which is easier to absorb into the fated closure of our jaded strife. We seek these obstacles only to bear them with pain, suffering and silence. Walking along we begin to find that the ease of being together has become the opposite in its match. We now define our roles through hateful vice.

    I am carved from this, I have lived through the most delicate detest by ones whom I have loved. I am hard now, saintly scarred, with vested interest in the blackness of the sinners abyss. Seeking now a shallow grave, seeking but not sought, in my dreams I move on my path.

    I am scared today, hoping today I will get it right, yet I know that that truth has yet to be proven and so thus this life has no truth to begin. Awashed with the pain I have held, I seek your comfort, and I seek that dance we once had.
    I am sorry, I am the person I am, and only that person can I be. Forgive me my dear rose; forgive me for not being the person whom you deserve. You will find that person one day, donít worry my love.

    My transgressions are not yours, my damnation you will not be requested to carry. Donít worry my dear, you will be happy, smile now, for me once more, grace me with that enchanting design, your lips and eyes should glisten once more, for a favored memory, one for me to keep while I walk this dark destined path.

    With that I will take my leave, allow you to breathe, allow you the sanctity of the favored souls.

    You glisten in my dreams, but when I wake, I see the hate in your eyes. I know you no longer love me, you havenít loved me for weeks, aside from the protests which you state you do, your actions yell at me.

    I am sorry I cause you this pain. I will go, trust me my love, I will walk away, and leave you in a dim dream on the brink of a warm river, looking at your own reflection through the crimson colored reflection of the crescent moon. Here you will forget me, and wake without knowing me. Be safe my love, always, be safe and be loved.

    You are cherished, and you will always be, forget my soul, forget my heart, I am nothing, I have nothing that will be strong enough to hold you, and keep you safe. Good bye my love, good bye.





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