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    Author: poetotoe
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 331/292/276
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 33
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    Why

    It takes time to live
    and no time to die
    among our tears
    if love applies.

    The problem is
    love controls us,
    everyone you see
    and cannot see too.

    For we live on earth
    as reality comes alive,
    nothing bothers us a lot,
    but love and our legacies.

    No children and no problem,
    but where did they come from?
    Not from the sea they say aloud,
    for your love is a witness to them.



    By Thomas G. McGowan: site poet.us 10.28.09 no.365




    Submitted on 2009-10-28 21:23:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the first verse- it is easy enough- I also like the overall look of the piece...However, I do seem to miss some thought gap that would make the title and first stanza jibe with the rest of it- I understand the theme is love, it is mentioned in every verse, but there is something about the point of view that throws me ...
    | Posted on 2009-11-06 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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