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Author: trinityfinger
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Tomorrow they'll say

a day of apples and Bella—
here, on this balcony
facing the sun.

Late spring

and mandarins
in my pantry; the orange glisten
of summer nearing, nascent

in bas-relief

of curled clouds fresco-white, bleached stone
hanging over as a new moon


Submitted on 2009-10-30 02:50:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hola beauty!

tomorrow never comes...

i love this. it perfectly speaks of the putting off perfection until tomorrow - but we know that the gap is never closed...

here's to appreciating what is NOW. and, you ROCK!

best for you babe,
| Posted on 2010-01-24 00:00:00 | by biska | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the contrast of apples and oranges, and the balcony... reminds me of Detroit in the italian part downtown, for some ungodly reason. Probably because that's the closest I've been to Italy, besides Epcott :) It's rare to smell fresh summer wind in the city, so it also reminds me of a harbor setting. Anyway, beautifully written... apples and Bella. Nice.
| Posted on 2009-11-15 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]'re waiting patiently for the bloom of summer to begin...and this shows here... release

Spring gives birth to new earth all around us...bringing life back to ALL living creatures under the regenerating sun...releasing from the bitter winter winds...we find fruitfulness within!!!

ahh the Smell of Summer winds...YUM

I love this and makes me wish we too were heading into summer instead of the Exact Opposite...24hrs and six months we pass each-other around the equator... yet there are moments under the sun, in the rain with frozen feet in Autumn leaves that speak to me of your slender...and know I have felt this moment in time for you ;)

hippy harhar that I am

be blessed beautiful one
| Posted on 2009-10-31 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]

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