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    dots Submission Name: Sunflowersdots
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    Author: trinityfinger
    ASL Info:    3
    Elite Ratio:    4.96 - 17/24/12
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Joke/Love
    Total Views: 71
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 468



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    Tomorrow they'll say

    a day of apples and Bella—
    here, on this balcony
    facing the sun.

    Late spring

    and mandarins
    in my pantry; the orange glisten
    of summer nearing, nascent

    in bas-relief

    of curled clouds fresco-white, bleached stone
    hanging over as a new moon
    blooms

    Release.




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      I love the contrast of apples and oranges, and the balcony... reminds me of Detroit in the italian part downtown, for some ungodly reason. Probably because that's the closest I've been to Italy, besides Epcott :) It's rare to smell fresh summer wind in the city, so it also reminds me of a harbor setting. Anyway, beautifully written... apples and Bella. Nice.
    | Posted on 2009-11-15 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      ahh...you're waiting patiently for the bloom of summer to begin...and this shows here... release

    Spring gives birth to new earth all around us...bringing life back to ALL living creatures under the regenerating sun...releasing from the bitter winter winds...we find fruitfulness within!!!

    ahh the Smell of Summer winds...YUM

    I love this and makes me wish we too were heading into summer instead of the Exact Opposite...24hrs and six months we pass each-other around the equator... yet there are moments under the sun, in the rain with frozen feet in Autumn leaves that speak to me of your slender...and know I have felt this moment in time for you ;)

    hippy harhar that I am

    be blessed beautiful one
    | Posted on 2009-10-31 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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