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    dots Submission Name: show medots
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    Author: gjenkins
    Elite Ratio:    1.85 - 88/107/97
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsshow medots
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    I'm a babbled method of
    inconsequence, as the
    clanking laughter of patrons
    hold rattled wit swollen
    and ambushed

    the ceiling is covered with
    bad intentions and flickering
    nothing stares, the light and
    smoke dancing over the
    pool table appear to me as
    horses running off a
    cliff

    she kisses me and gives me a
    blank stare of her twilight, over
    my world, her flesh,
    my unforgiving touch, her sincerity
    is pushed out into
    the night, followed by
    her coat and shoes, out
    into the snow




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