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    dots Submission Name: nineteendots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    High on the arch of his raised eyebrow
    the curioslty of a man from God

    He has never seen a night so long
    as to discover the crying face of the moon

    The music plays at a steep level
    and the sound of one broken heart

    whistling
    softly mimicking the wind he's feeling on the front of his grin

    walking the very straight lining down the front of his suit jacket

    a curiosity of its own

    and
    a
    riddle
    to find
    this man




    Submitted on 2009-10-31 00:47:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Makes me think of the man in black.

    And I don't mean Johnny Cash
    | Posted on 2009-12-09 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      I read it and liked it and thought it was good. Then I read it backwards and it seemed to capture a really strange and lost feeling -- the feeling of moving your lips and no words coming out. Weird.

    It was great!
    | Posted on 2009-11-13 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      I find this very interesting even if I can't put all the pieces together. If this were the 60's, I'd say it was acid. It's way out there. I like it.
    | Posted on 2009-11-01 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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