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Love Like This

Author: Cora Windover
ASL Info:    1,292/it/Radiant Garden
Elite Ratio:    4.15 - 862 /763 /204
Words: 179
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Love Like This

I want to know if your hands in my lips
Will light up your face,
In a smile,
In a gasp,
In a recognition of all that we've shared
Of the words we've written
To fill this empty space.

I want to know if you'll let me want you
Light you up like the roles we play
When you're the repressed one
And I'm your savior,
Opening you like the break of day -
Breathing heavy
From the words you say.

Will you let me dig my tongue in the curve of your hip,
Press my fingers at your lips?
Take the time to memorize you,
Count your freckles
Like I've always wanted to do,
Until I know them like I know your soul -
The pattern of it,
The shape,
The little hisses
And the intakes.

I want to know if you understand
That you already love me.
You've said it before,
And I'm sure
You say it every day to people who don't care.
But I've been there.
And love like this isn't everywhere.

Submitted on 2009-10-31 01:05:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I would like to let you know that i think you are an incredibly talented writter and you continue to leave me spellbound.

Your form, your flow, everything seems to fit together perfectly, i can only hope to master the craft someday as you already have.

Just a few of my favorite lines:

"In a recognition of all that we've shared
Of the words we've written
To fill this empty space."

Very thoughtful it conveyed many emotions to me and made me think of how disgraced blank pages are in my notebooks, how if i could only fill them perfectly, with put together stanzas everything would be okay, and when i fail to, i scribble on them, the first things that come to mind, floosy pictures of warped memories, failures because i am terrible at art, and that makes two, both art and poetry.

And well thats enough [censored]ing for one comment, i think the lack of sleep is getting to me here finally. Did you know its getting light outside when i never even went to sleep? no i didnt think so.

WOW.... what have i been smoking...
Sorry to be such a [censored] up all over this comment,
I figure i might as well leave it now
| Posted on 2009-11-01 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ]

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