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    dots Submission Name: Love Like Thisdots
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    Author: Cora Windover
    ASL Info:    1,292/it/Radiant Garden
    Elite Ratio:    4.16 - 862/761/201
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 38
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 1151



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    dotsLove Like Thisdots
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    I want to know if your hands in my lips
    Will light up your face,
    In a smile,
    In a gasp,
    In a recognition of all that we've shared
    Of the words we've written
    To fill this empty space.

    I want to know if you'll let me want you
    Light you up like the roles we play
    When you're the repressed one
    And I'm your savior,
    Opening you like the break of day -
    Breathing heavy
    From the words you say.

    Will you let me dig my tongue in the curve of your hip,
    Press my fingers at your lips?
    Take the time to memorize you,
    Count your freckles
    Like I've always wanted to do,
    Until I know them like I know your soul -
    The pattern of it,
    The shape,
    The little hisses
    And the intakes.

    I want to know if you understand
    That you already love me.
    You've said it before,
    And I'm sure
    You say it every day to people who don't care.
    But I've been there.
    And love like this isn't everywhere.




    Submitted on 2009-10-31 01:05:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I would like to let you know that i think you are an incredibly talented writter and you continue to leave me spellbound.

    Your form, your flow, everything seems to fit together perfectly, i can only hope to master the craft someday as you already have.

    Just a few of my favorite lines:

    "In a recognition of all that we've shared
    Of the words we've written
    To fill this empty space."

    Very thoughtful it conveyed many emotions to me and made me think of how disgraced blank pages are in my notebooks, how if i could only fill them perfectly, with put together stanzas everything would be okay, and when i fail to, i scribble on them, the first things that come to mind, floosy pictures of warped memories, failures because i am terrible at art, and that makes two, both art and poetry.

    And well thats enough [censored]ing for one comment, i think the lack of sleep is getting to me here finally. Did you know its getting light outside when i never even went to sleep? no i didnt think so.

    WOW.... what have i been smoking...
    Sorry to be such a [censored] up all over this comment,
    I figure i might as well leave it now
    CHannie
    | Posted on 2009-11-01 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ]



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