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    dots Submission Name: Cataluna's Songdots
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    Author: trinityfinger
    ASL Info:    3
    Elite Ratio:    5.05 - 15/20/11
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Story/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 38
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 941



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    dotsCataluna's Songdots
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    She forgets
    what excess means, gorges herself
    on sleepless nights and pills from some back-alley dealer,
    tunes her bruised guitar and sings of endless light in Barcelona—
    where the boys are bold and the women rule the art of flamenco
    and paella. It's there, she says, where passion and virtue
    are entwined and familiar: a black cat's fur
    on a white leather couch.

    Sing of the road and watch the stars revolve, she'll always say—
    for this night is tattooed upon all our fingertips: green eyes and red earth
    a marriage of perfection and fluid hips, of temptation being a shrine
    to anoint with fevered lips.

    Bring an ocean with you, and know this world
    forgets while she tries to sleep.


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    Submitted on 2009-11-01 01:29:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i feel that i am coming back to where i left off last time!
    but then i like this theme of spanish nights.

    btw , i love the last phase. inspirational.



    i had a quick look at your critiques (!) i came to wondering just how many of your words have graced these web pages, and how many have benefitted from them. amazing really. j xx
    | Posted on 2009-11-05 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, that was just about perfect.
    Do you have these god moments often?
    | Posted on 2009-11-01 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the disconnect between the negative reality and the positive reminiscence. Its a cool way to get wrapped up in memory.


    "Bring an ocean with you" - what an awesome line.

    I'd be interested to know why you put your line breaks where you did and how the lines in the largest stanza expand and then shrink. the enjambment is good.
    | Posted on 2009-11-01 00:00:00 | by SupposedlyHuman | [ Reply to This ]


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