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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    15/Female/tmon
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 92/158/235
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 11
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1119



    Description:
       i wrote this in a haze, just letting it come. im still not quite sure how it sounds.


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    dotsThere is no nowdots
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    Your clothes on the floor
    Your mother at the door
    And as i jumped out the window
    I made my way out of your life forever
    The times never change
    Feelings stay the same
    If i said i missed you,
    I never meant to do your wrong
    Would you stare at me,
    And ask me why i've lied for so long?
    And why i continue to lie now?
    As if i know the answers
    As if i can control who i am
    Where i've been
    And what i've done
    I was just here to have some fun
    But you broke through my shield,
    And took from me everything that is real
    Now my life is stuck
    Between What-if fantisies,
    And long gone memories
    There is no now
    The present has been forgotten
    Time itself has been left out in the rain to rot
    And as i live
    Solely for every moment that doesnt exsist
    Taking chances that soooner rather than later will cause my life to end,
    There is no now
    Because there is no then
    Giving up, you see
    Is giving in





    Submitted on 2009-11-01 04:23:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That is completely true. The whole thing has a calm tone. Like discontent combined with misery and acceptance. (If that makes any sense.) At least, that is what I got from it.

    I like it, especially, "I live solely for every moment that doesn't exist."
    There's something about that line that really stuck out for me. Maybe because I do the same.

    I have no complaints here.
    Nicely done.

    -nikkkkkki
    | Posted on 2009-11-02 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]


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