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    dots Submission Name: Memories of the nightdots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    15/Female/tmon
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 92/158/234
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 19
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1297



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    dotsMemories of the nightdots
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    You can't keep me right here
    Wrapped in my own design
    Will you take my life
    Erase my mind?

    Can you withhold everything for so very long
    Disgraced with lies
    Don't you know that this is wrong?

    Living once
    Is no big deal
    When the pain and anger
    You try to conceal

    Why would you want
    To live
    Any more than that?

    And there is no way im going down without a fight
    To see the lake again
    Your face, a cold sillouette?
    What i wouldnt do to go back
    The leaves as blazed as we were

    Nice lighting
    Shimmering soft,
    Happy in silence
    We all goof off
    And it all comes back to me
    The night
    Our eyes

    Those were the best times
    Of our lives

    i want to bring the pain free air
    Back into my life
    And trees block the sky
    From the pillars of smoke we create

    And all
    I feel
    is laughter

    Pained with disaster

    Dont let the memories slip
    Dont let yourself trip
    You've come to far to end this now
    You will make it
    Or you'll fake it
    Somehow.




    Submitted on 2009-11-01 04:32:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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