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the end of time


Author: blackdemigod13
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Words: 53
Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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the end of time



the world lay in deep sleep
his cries were heard as he begin to weep.
it was time to go and bring his children home,
though his heart was broken for those he had never kown.
the sound of gabriel's trumpet was heard around the world,
as it brought with it god's word.




Submitted on 2009-11-01 17:21:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very well done, and I can feel the emotion through this one. Very nicely written and very deep.
| Posted on 2010-02-26 00:00:00 | by Mythica | [ Reply to This ]


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