Never Seen It Coming by Childe-Wrote

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Author:	Childe-Wrote
Elite Ratio:	1.78 - 17/53/44
Words:	234

Class/Type:	Poetry/
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Average Vote:	4.0000
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Look into the shadows
And you'll find the stories
A story we all know so well

She sits against the wall
With dried up tears
A broken smile

She comes out to play
And offers a porcelain hand
When that boy is nothing but down

She stood by his side
And caught him twice

The demons claimed her foolish
As the angels wept in her place

Oh Sweetheart, don't you know?
That boy has someone else

With a broken heart
She sulked into the shadows

Throwing up her hands
Ready to give up in frustration
She screamed in a gravelled voice
"I shall wait"

If you force him to leave
You will not be able to see

Instead of one
You will loose two

Oh foolish little boy
Open your stubborn eyes

Quit being too damn blind
Don't you know she's crazy over you?

Without any hints in his direction
The shower hides her breakin points

Her teeth clamped down
And her hair pulled out in fistfuls
The tunes drowned out her screams

With one last apology
The angels sung a lullaby

She ran that water just a little deep
And slipped right on in

When she had the time
To take that one last breath

They never seen it coming
When her face turned sky blue

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