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    dots Submission Name: Open Your Eyes Boydots
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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.86 - 17/47/39
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 16
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1256



    Description:
       Dedicated to Vincent Medina..
    Someone I could never have


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    dotsOpen Your Eyes Boydots
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    There's a girl hiding in the shadows
    She's there when he's all down

    And she offers that shy smile
    When the time is near and right

    She stood by his side from day one
    Thirty Six passed and she caught him twice

    But baby girl, he's with someone else
    So heart broken and worn down
    She sulks back in her shadows

    She's forced to fight against the demons
    That screams 'he needs to go'
    But that young girl cries
    And clutches to Hope

    If he has to leave, you'll loose two
    So she dries those weary eyes
    And leaves behind her pride

    Pity on you, naive little boy
    When will you open those eyes
    You're too damn blind to finally see
    She's absolutely crazy about you

    She keeps those lips sealed shut
    And patiently stands on the sidelines

    Doesn't dare give any no hints
    When she's slowly breaking down

    Couldn't you hear those cries?
    Of course not, the shower drained them out

    So continue living in that denial
    And weep without anyone looking




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