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    dots Submission Name: Never Seen It Comingdots

    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 17/53/44
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsNever Seen It Comingdots

    Look into the shadows
    And you'll find the stories
    A story we all know so well

    She sits against the wall
    With dried up tears
    A broken smile

    She comes out to play
    And offers a porcelain hand
    When that boy is nothing but down

    She stood by his side
    And caught him twice

    The demons claimed her foolish
    As the angels wept in her place

    Oh Sweetheart, don't you know?
    That boy has someone else

    With a broken heart
    She sulked into the shadows

    Throwing up her hands
    Ready to give up in frustration
    She screamed in a gravelled voice
    "I shall wait"

    If you force him to leave
    You will not be able to see

    Instead of one
    You will loose two

    Oh foolish little boy
    Open your stubborn eyes

    Quit being too damn blind
    Don't you know she's crazy over you?

    Without any hints in his direction
    The shower hides her breakin points

    Her teeth clamped down
    And her hair pulled out in fistfuls
    The tunes drowned out her screams

    With one last apology
    The angels sung a lullaby

    She ran that water just a little deep
    And slipped right on in

    When she had the time
    To take that one last breath

    They never seen it coming
    When her face turned sky blue

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