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    dots Submission Name: I Owe Youdots
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    Author: trynfinity
    ASL Info:    38/f/California
    Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 149/145/91
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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       I touch you and you shiver
    you start to turn away.
    But stop your mind now racing
    what to do so you can stay.


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    dotsI Owe Youdots
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    I touch you and you shiver
    you start to turn away.
    But stop your mind now racing
    what to do so you can stay.
    ~
    Touching me it bores you
    it's a turn off through and through.
    There is nothing to make you want me
    pretending is getting hard to do.
    ~
    You've tried weed and porno
    trying to alter your sight and mind.
    But nothing makes me better
    It wouldn't help if you were blind.
    ~
    I try to show you that I want you
    I try to be something a little more.
    But all you see is I fail you
    ending up turned off continuously bored.
    ~
    I hate what I now am to you
    what I see reflected in your eyes.
    The person you can't stand to touch
    and you're starting to despise.
    ~
    I never wanted to be like this
    never wanted to be for you this bad.
    I thought that I could love you enough
    I wouldn't be the worst thing you ever had.
    ~
    But time has proven me oh so wrong
    I cannot be worth your time.
    I cannot be the one you want
    I don't deserve you to be mine.
    ~
    I'm sorry that I failed you
    for all that I've done so wrong.
    I wanted to be so much more
    but I've been a mistake now all along.

    Heather Kemper
    October 29,2009




    Submitted on 2009-11-01 18:12:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow did the person say all that or jus the mind thats strives to strike at perfection.this is a good write but its sad.yep but i amglad its long ago 2009 and past now.
    | Posted on 2011-04-10 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]


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