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    dots Submission Name: Mirror Mirrordots

    Author: trynfinity
    ASL Info:    38/f/California
    Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 149/145/91
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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       Mirror mirror on the wall
    tell me what you see.
    Do you see the exact same things
    that I when I look at me?

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    dotsMirror Mirrordots

    Mirror mirror on the wall
    tell me what you see.
    Do you see the exact same things
    that I when I look at me?

    I see a total failure
    a mistake that never should have been.
    Someone who didn't deserve his love
    who doesn't deserve to live.

    I see someone who's ugly
    who cannot be desired because of that.
    Someone who isn't worthy
    a mere disappointment and that's the facts.

    I see a desperate person
    who knows she can't be loved.
    Who knew no matter how hard he tried
    he'd leave because of who she was.

    Someone who fails the ones that love her
    embarrass them all in time.
    So mirror mirror tell me please
    is the reflection you see inside?

    Heather Kemper
    October 28,2009

    Submitted on 2009-11-01 18:13:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this one brought me back and brought me back to thoughts of sylvia plath's "Mirror"

    she felt so unlovable ----and so unloved and when she looked in the mirror, she did not like what she saw...

    such a piece that should have gotten much more comment---

    but then many here don't like "depressing."

    yet, as Sylvia always said..."readers want to hear it from someone who has been there and felt the worst"---
    | Posted on 2012-10-09 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you for your time and your thought...about the fourth line, you're right it was a typo. Thank you for pointing it out.
    As for my reflection, it's been a long time since i've seen anything but..what is written here, if i ever truly have.
    | Posted on 2011-04-11 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]

    something in that 4th line...i keep wanting to read it "than I" just feels pretty awkward in that spot...maybe some way to smooth that out?
    | Posted on 2011-04-08 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      beauty is on the inside...and when we look inside of ourselves, we hope to find a reflection we can live with.
    regardless of how others look at is...
    their view is often skewed by what they want from us.

    sometimes rejection from another can cause us to reject ourselves...but really we should take a closer look into that mirror...

    maybe we will realize what we see is not bad, but good...

    | Posted on 2011-04-08 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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