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    dots Submission Name: Spread Your Wingsdots
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    Author: trynfinity
    ASL Info:    38/f/California
    Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 149/145/91
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    Description:
       For my friend who was too young to die. Swine flu took her life a month and a half after she gave birth to her fourth child.


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    dotsSpread Your Wingsdots
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    I looked out of the window
    as the doctor pulled the plugs.
    Waiting for them to tell me
    a few minutes was all there was
    ~
    I looked up and then I saw you
    my Angel in the sky.
    You spread for me your wings
    toward heaven you began to fly.
    ~
    I knew just then you'd left us
    in that moment they said you died.
    My heart broke and I was empty
    for my baby now I cried.
    ~
    I know that you are safe now
    no longer sick in so much pain.
    Our father took you home,
    an Angel he has made.
    ~
    Everyday now I will miss you
    miss your laughter miss your life.
    But I know you'll be in heaven
    My Angel now may you fly.


    Heather Kemper
    October 10,2009
    For Liz




    Submitted on 2009-11-01 18:15:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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