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    dots Submission Name: Writingdots

    Author: Linzi
    ASL Info:    24.f.wales
    Elite Ratio:    5.91 - 80/100/94
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I skate upon

    the untouched snow

    inktrails following

    my path

    as I





    Free skate

    no-one again can


    the same markings

    Submitted on 2009-11-01 18:25:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      practicing for the olympics of poetry...doing pirouettes on icy paper, hoping the pen/skate's point/blade will dig in and leave a mark...

    whimsical but sort of like a bat in a cave...soaring, flitting writing around, but landing in a good spot...almost like intentions without real intentions.

    the title drew me..and i am glad i read this...

    so concise...turns on a dime..like a polished skater could, and would.

    | Posted on 2011-08-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Really nice, it had that fairy-ish feel to it... the pic you used fit it perfectly. Pretty.
    | Posted on 2009-11-01 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed this poem, you have earned the right to write a poem about what it means to write and that is no easy task. The way you wrote this is like a child answering a most difficult question with the simplest answer, like you just took the sword from the stone. I picture you landing after the mid-section of the poem as if to say "Poof! look at me! Bet you couldn't do that!". So as you can see I am quite impressed by the whole thing.

    | Posted on 2009-11-01 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]

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