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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 697
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1070



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       Just something I was thinking about while tipsy walking around at 5 AM around town, shedding my stress singing something like this lol

    Crysta Perak


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    What will I do?
    Who will I know?

    In this fucking eternity
    All there is
    Is dusk of life
    of a life that is gone

    Into the pits of hell I go!

    The turning of glorious
    enraptured by this fleeting moment

    Will life be as I've said?
    Will I take this fucking destiny
    and let it drop forth in front me
    without any revolutions to befall me?

    Until I turn this prescribed destiny

    into fate

    that's when the perspective will change

    that's when I'll be
    what I am
    when I do
    what I see

    I am bringing the world
    To me!

    This is where I am
    this is
    What I
    am!

    In this untrained intent
    there is a spring of life
    of a life that is

    alive!

    And it never fucking ends!

    It never

    fucking
    ends

    by:Crysta Perak




    Submitted on 2009-11-01 22:43:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "Alive" and "untrained intent" seem to sum up the poem well. I think we've all had the moments, feeling motionless and powerless. Then, comes inspiration, motivation, a stirring of the soul. A lovely poem, it inspired me.
    | Posted on 2009-11-03 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]


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