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    dots Submission Name: Hastadots
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    Author: FallenGrace
    Elite Ratio:    5.54 - 392/430/107
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1272
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsHastadots
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    These are months of memories,
    wrapped in cellophane
    left as the orphan on your doorstep.

    In this heart there is no room
    no place for regret
    no home for hate
    no anger left.

    Only goodbye.
    Only sorry.
    Only silent words to reconcile
    what never should have been.

    May you keep your voice forever
    that a stronger man might hear.




    Submitted on 2009-11-02 10:14:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      so i sort of love this and i tried to click on about twenty of your other poems until i realized they were all deleted.

    all? may i ask why you are depriving us of your lovely words?

    because this is far too pretty to keep all to yourself.
    | Posted on 2009-11-02 00:00:00 | by Theophilus | [ Reply to This ]
      hasta- spear? hand jesture? until?

    kinda three fold.

    my only thought for change might be here:

    May you keep your voice forever
    (one) a stronger man might hear.

    that seems too thhhhhhhhhh or something.

    you always have an interesting voice james. it is tinged with something i can't always put my finger on. maybe melancholy. hmmm not sure. i like that your writes have a lyric quality.

    this feels like a package sent. all special delivery like.


    | Posted on 2009-11-02 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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