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    dots Submission Name: Can You See It In My Eyes?dots
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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.86 - 17/47/39
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 22
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1025



    Description:
       About a guy that's already in a relationship.
    But I have fallen head over heels from day one
    Yet I stand on the sidelines as just a 'friend'


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    dotsCan You See It In My Eyes?dots
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    You don't know how I'm feeling
    I have yet to tell the truth

    Terrified deep inside
    Can you see it in my eyes?

    I tremble when I'm near
    And fight back the simple urges

    I can't tell you how I feel
    But can you see it in my eyes?

    I'm hanging on a rope
    Fearful to ever let go

    I long to say 'I love you'
    Yet I push these feelings away

    Terrified like a child
    I've become paralyzed

    The camouflaged emotions
    Lead to silent tears and hidden pains

    I can see it in your eyes
    Our friendship will never fade

    Now the question stands still and tall
    Will you be able to see the same in mine?

    I can not tell this lie anymore
    So I confess all through these words

    My dillema summarized
    And these feelings comatized

    Soon, will lead to my demise




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