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    dots Submission Name: The Emotions Stirreddots
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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 17/53/44
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 987
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsThe Emotions Stirreddots
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    You don't know how I'm feeling
    This heart you are stealing

    My emotions stirr inside
    And screaming is my mind

    Don't tell me what is not
    How can you not see it in my eyes
    And forever plus a day, I'm by your side

    Trembling when I am near
    And confusion when I am far

    I cannot say how I feel
    But I really do care

    When I'm hanging on that rope
    And I'm trying too hard to cope

    My heart screams 'I love you'
    My mind screams 'It's far too soon'

    I can see it in your eyes
    Our friendship will never fade

    When our time is up and paid
    And we go our seperate ways
    When everything is not said

    It all will soon lead to my dismay
    When you finally walk away




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