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    dots Submission Name: Sindots
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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 17/53/44
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsSindots
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    The words they speak
    Behind our backs they seek

    My chin is up high
    Within this broken pride

    I try to find the unspoken words
    Yet they refuse to be heard

    I replay the mistake over and over
    Yet this apology decides to stay behind

    Without breaking this barrier
    With my strength, holding back this terrier

    All I have left now is my shame
    And nothing else in time could be tamed

    My broken dreams have fallen in vain
    And all that has been left behind was my pain

    You should know what I have said before
    And all that I had known became torn

    This life is a battlefield
    And if you let the demons win
    You might as well give up the fight
    Cause your sin is too strong to forget




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