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    dots Submission Name: to you from me.dots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    16 going on 17
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 174/201/192
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 21
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 546



    Description:
       "...I will not die, I'll wait here for you. I feel alive when you're beside me. I will not die. I'll wait here for you. In my time of dying."
    -time of dying-
    by:3DG:)



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    dotsto you from me.dots
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    the darkness could kill me
    the skies could all fall down.
    my heart would break slowly.
    and I'll die somehow.

    either by choice or by heartache.
    by your hands or by mine.
    either by gun or by razors.
    right now or in time.

    I can't grasp losing you
    I can't let you go.
    Theres too many secrets.
    things that you know.

    so here's my heart.
    as you can see.
    it's breakable but a present
    to you from me.




    Submitted on 2009-11-02 13:58:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this poem. It's cute, short, and to the point. There are no long descriptions dragging on into eternity. The poem has a certain charm. It is certainly a gift and expresses exactly how you feel.
    | Posted on 2009-11-03 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]


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