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    dots Submission Name: Wishing You Were Heredots
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    Author: arod44
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2/0/3
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    Description:
       It's pretty repetitive and cliché, I think. It just flowed out of me though and i felt like writing. I want to know though, is TOO cheesy? Opinions or comments please? Good or bad. Thanks.


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    dotsWishing You Were Heredots
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    as I open my eyes to another morning
    as I doze off to my professor droning
    as the cotton clouds continue floating
    I’m wishing you were here

    when I lay awake through the night
    when I watch the stars shine bright
    when my day is bad and nothing is alright
    I'm wishing you were here

    while the sun continues to burn
    while planet earth continues to turn
    while the moon inspires a new nocturne
    I'm wishing you were here

    although I’m surrounded by many faces
    although I travel to different places
    although my life is full of changes
    I'm wishing you were here

    no matter what they may say
    no matter who gets in the way
    no matter how far you are away
    I'll be near wishing you were here




    Submitted on 2009-11-02 16:31:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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