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    dots Submission Name: You Could Have Been Strongerdots
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    Author: Midnight Shadow
    ASL Info:    22/f
    Elite Ratio:    2.24 - 47/151/126
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    dotsYou Could Have Been Strongerdots
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    This look you're giving me
    its such a fantasy, yet so innocent
    It reminds me of a child's dream
    to be more than they could be
    Beautiful smile on such a dope
    we had it good, your talk wasn't so smooth
    but I could see you'd never use me
    Boy, we coulda fell in love
    but you weren't strong enough
    to handle all that i was
    I was just too much




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