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    dots Submission Name: out of the light into darknessdots
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    Author: mellonieheart
    ASL Info:    18 f tx
    Elite Ratio:    0.91 - 1/3/10
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 15
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 401



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       This is the first poem i've ever submited anywhere so i hope it is okay its to someone very dear to me . i hope you all enjoy it.


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    dotsout of the light into darknessdots
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    when i walk out of the light
    I join you on the darker side
    you hold out your hand for mine
    our fingers lock for the first time
    I look up and see your smile
    I feel so small like a child
    I watch your hand as it grasps mine
    a feeling so sweet, so devine
    I do not wish to return to the light
    my heart is yours
    my eternal night.




    Submitted on 2009-11-02 20:16:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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