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    dots Submission Name: Life: A War in It's selfdots
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    Author: Sepheroth432
    ASL Info:    18/Male/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    6.04 - 52/39/23
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 25
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 1126



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       I dont really know how I wrote this I just thoght about life and war, both seeming like something that is fought through no matter what we do. I look foard to comments and critiques on this peice, but I already knw its not one of my best.


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    dotsLife: A War in It's selfdots
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    In a life such as this
    we must fight the war to gain our bliss
    whether with a guns, sword or fist
    we seem to be on everyones death list

    In a life such a mine
    love is a fight I make divine
    hate make my rivals die
    This war is will not lie

    In a life like his
    His wife may leave
    but in hs eart he still believes
    blood falls, tears run dry
    but yet he still tries
    his life is a battle day after day
    And he wishes for it all to end sdo he may yet live again.

    In a life such as hers
    her man cheated on her heart
    but she finds a love that makes her cry
    but the tears are those hat make her fly
    love, heart, wonder, bliss
    yet onething eludes her
    the love of another
    only fining love in her dreams

    So yet in this war
    dont find that lifes a bore
    if we continue to fight we die
    our lifeless bodies will lay
    upon our souls shall be free to live or leave
    but first we must believe

    ~~ Justin Laban




    Submitted on 2009-11-02 22:24:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ..Bottom by Tool would better explain what I feel.

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    | Posted on 2009-11-03 00:00:00 | by misschalloner | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece makes me think about my life:

    Just as a forewarning, I tend to make relations and discuss particular incidences that have occurred within my own life in order to relate to works people have given birth to.

    This particular incident, of mine, happened quite recently. I had to disclose information concerning the most personal inter-workings of my life that have made me completely and utterly miserable and tormented me since childhood to the man I love the most of this earth. In three and a half years, I had never once spoken about it. Was it the right thing? To get things off my chest? To start anew and possibly gain real happiness? Well, the correct answer is, yes. However, I do not feel that the answer holds any real truth, at least not right now. -I am using this as an example toward your work- When horrible things happen to you, you just want to curl up in a little ball and die. Die! Then, even worse, when you finally find a way of forgetting it or somehow coping with it, it gets ripped from its grave once more! You simply cannot take that.
    I suppose what I am trying to say is that, what you are conveying through your work, I have felt. I just have yet to really feel the...turn around from it.
    -I am trying to have faith. I hope your work, your thoughts, ring true.

    C.

    Thank you for reading my vent.
    | Posted on 2009-11-03 00:00:00 | by misschalloner | [ Reply to This ]



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