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    dots Submission Name: Your life in my handsdots
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    Author: brokenbylove
    ASL Info:    23/m/australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.37 - 62/249/222
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 21
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    dotsYour life in my handsdots
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    I held your life in my hands
    I begged you to hold on
    I watched you let go
    I've never felt so helpless
    Never felt so lost 
    I watched you die with one last sigh
    I'm left here with tears in my eyes
    There was nothing I could do 
    My heart is breaking
    My hands are shaking
    What do I do?
    I feel like I've failed you...




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