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    dots Submission Name: Sexed Outdots
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    Author: strike three
    ASL Info:    32/m/Ethiopia
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 49/54/28
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSexed Outdots
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    Tight thongs, legs long,
    Phat ass, bring it along.
    Big lights, netted mics,
    Drama fights, hot nights.
    What you want? Money green!
    Lots of things and to be seen!
    Take it off and open wide,
    Let this Money get inside.
    Too far. Too late…
    Too much soul to put at stake.
    Too much me in every place.
    Shiny wrapped hollow space.
    Chinese plastic for my face.
    I’ve been punk’d no doubt,
    Totally f*&^%^ sexed out.




    Submitted on 2009-11-03 03:29:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love your style. It's unique and refreshing. I don't know why the word is blanked out, but it does hinder the reading a bit. The ending was very clever.
    | Posted on 2009-11-03 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. some words have been a little blanked out. However, "phat" clever use. honestly I liked the style. Choice of words..not so much. but it's still good.
    -Rachel:)
    | Posted on 2009-11-03 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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