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    dots Submission Name: Nothing you can dodots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    15/Female/tmon
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 92/158/234
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 12
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1267



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       Well then.... figure it out yourself


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    dotsNothing you can dodots
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    Scribbles overcome words
    Through the internal battle within
    Where words are unsafe
    And images, they cannot be decoded
    So why am I still writing?
    Have you ever witnessed the insides of my ravaged soul?
    They are damaged beyond repair
    No way you piece it back together will ever make it whole again
    And yet you continue to try
    Why?
    Is it so hard to forget what I am,
    And move on?
    Yes, my actions make you want to puke
    They disgust you
    Like nothing else
    And when it comes down to it
    Your god says
    That it they morally wrong
    So you will try repetitively
    To change the last thing I have left
    Until I am a sack
    Of nothingness
    That does only your will
    And gods biding
    For the rest of my life
    Is that what you want?
    I know it is, whether you acknowledge it or not
    All you ever asked for was a puppet
    To drag around
    On silly strings and act proud of
    And that isn’t what you got
    Is it so terrible that I have a brain?
    I’m stubborn, I’m challenging,
    I got that all from you
    And when I’m gone
    There will be nothing you can do.




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      Well you commented on my poem, and I looked on the need comments list, and saw your poem on there. So, I decided to drop in and read it. I can honestly say I can relate to this poem, my whole family are jehovah's witnesses, so I know about the whole puppet feeling. This reminds me of a lot of my writing, the way its written. A lot of the time I dont know what I'm going to write about, and the beginning is pretty vague. Then all of the sudden, the words just hit you, and you cant stop writing. There's nothing wrong with that, Im just pointing it out. When I first started reading, I wasn't sure what the poem was about. ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2009-11-05 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]


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