This in an interesting subject in the sense that it is highly relatable. I understood everything you were trying to say about inner turmoil and being attacked by the world around you because it was blatant and straightforward. From a poetry standpoint, however, I felt cheated out of interpreting your text. The phrases you say mean a lot, but they are too conventional to make them interesting or artistic. A poem must have something that makes it memorable, and nothing really jumped off the page here. All in all, it was a good attempt, keep writing! That sort of passion that you expressed is everything when writing :)
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