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    dots Submission Name: last lovedots
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    Author: mellonieheart
    ASL Info:    18 f tx
    Elite Ratio:    0.91 - 1/3/10
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 17
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 735



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       i've thought this way several times it goes with my extreamly long journal


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    dotslast lovedots
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    I loved this boy, I loved him so,
    I can't believe he let me go.
    He sat this girl upon his knee
    and said he chose her instead of me.
    My mum came home late that night,
    she looked for me I was nowhere in sight.
    She went to my room my room was all red,
    all it took was one bullet to the head.
    She dropped to her knees and picked me up.
    And my family came in to see what was up.
    My brothers and sisters were crying hardcore.
    They found my letter lying on the floor.
    On my letter it said dig a hole six feet deep
    and place two shot guns at my feet.
    Tell my friends I did my best
    and ask them if I’ve passed the test.




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